2 Part Question

1) What has the comments others have posted on my blog taught me about my own writing?
   
      I have received several comments from many different Gary's class students, and from that, I learned some useful things in writing. The most useful thing about getting comments is that I can notice my error and fix it so that I can write much better paragraph. Also, not only the grammar errors, they give me advice how to write more plentiful writing. This makes me to think more deeply about how I can add more details. Students who wrote comments on my blog were so kind and taught me with details, it helped me to get willing to learn and improve my writing skills. In brief, comments on my blog from other students gave me good influence in writing.  

 

2) What have the comments I have posted on other blogs taught me about writing?

 

      Commenting other student's blog is very thoughtful thing to do. From that, I have learned many things. As I write comments on other's blog, I try to be very helpful for their writing. This makes me to think more deeply in grammar, and remind me with proper grammar which I can check whether it's correct. When I keep doing it, I feel like I learn even more by that. Also, by reading other's writing to write a comment, I can learn many writing skills and I use them to write better writing later on which is very useful. Therefore, writing comments on other blogs helps me to learn more in grammar and makes my writing more plentiful.

Reasons/Example Paragraph

                                                    

                                               

                                
                               Efficacy of Drinking Water

 

             

             Water has been known as very important element for our body to become healthy in several reasons. First of all, water has excellent detoxifying qualities. When water goes through our body, it excretes harmful oxygen and waste matter from the body. This is also related to the skin so when you drink a lot of water, you can have smooth skin due to the detoxifying effect. Secondly, drinking a lot of water helps in diet. Drinking water makes you feel satiety and satisfied so that you get to eat less than you expected. Also, water helps metabolism and this burns up calories which eventually helps to loose weight. Lastly, water assists in deep sleep. According to Korea Medical Foundation, body uses water during the sleep so when your body is lack of water, the blood density goes high which interrupts the sleep. By that, they recommend to drink 1/2 cup of water before going to bed to get a deep sleep. In short, the formula of  'water = health' is now a common sense.